Sunday, May 25, 2008

Walk
Night covers me
Moon guides me
Stars lift me
Orion is strong after all
Can't stop
Cold nips my nose
My fingers tingle
Run on
And on
And on
Into the darkness

5 comments:

Brass Baboon said...

This really is a beautiful poem.

Melabo said...

thankyou

Brass Baboon said...

"Orion is strong after all"

I keep coming back to that line. It's a rip snorter.

Melabo said...

Really?
um thats wierd
Do u really like my poems?
cuz everyone else hates them

Brass Baboon said...

You know that ain't true.

Else Sofi wouldn't have linked one of yers in her blog eh?

PLus they are quite technically awesome. Often I think you write better poetry than myself.

PLus you are only 14 and thus beginning your poetrical journey of awesome. When I was your age I'd written maybe 3 poems or sommink. And. They. Are. Aweful. I mean groan inducingly tedius clunky rhyming affairs.

And I think most people find the dark nature of most of your topic matter a bit hard-going. Have you thought to try branching into different angles? (this is coming from someone who writes much as you do and finds branching quite tough).

The key thing is: do YOU like your poems?

OK. Way too long comment. I need sleep. 2 more poetry blogs to check before sleep. Adios.